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Document A
Benjamin Rush, "Thoughts Upon Female Education," a speech
to the Philadelphia Academy of Young Ladies (Boston, 1787).
The state of property in America renders it necessary for...our
citizens to employ themselves in different occupations for the advancement of
their fortunes. This cannot be done without the assistance of the female
members of the community. They must be the stewards and guardians of their
husbands' property....
From the numerous avocations to which a professional life exposes
gentlemen in America from their families, a principle share of the instruction
of children naturally devolves upon the women...our ladies should be qualified
to a certain degree, by a peculiar and suitable education, to concur in
instructing their sons in the principles of liberty and government.
[Therefore, a female education should include:]
1. A knowledge of the English language.
2. [T]he writing of a fair and legible hand [is] a necessary branch
of female education...
3. Some knowledge of figures and bookkeeping is absolutely
necessary to qualify a young lady for the duties which await her in this
country...
4. An acquaintance with geography and some instruction in
chronology will enable a young lady to read history, biography, and travels...
5. It will will be necessary to connect all these branches of
education with regular instruction in the Christian religion...
Document B
Mary Lyon, "Female Education, Tendencies Of The Principles
Embraced, And The System Adopted In The Mount Holyoke Female Seminary"
(1839).
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1. Religious culture. Public worship, the Bible lesson, and other
appropriate duties of the Sabbath; a regular observance of secret devotion,
suitable attention to religious instruction and social prayer meetings, and the
maintaining of a consistent Christian deportment, are considered the most
important objects of regard, for both teachers and scholars....
2. Cultivation of benevolence. While many of the present active
generation are fixed in their habits, and will never rise above the standard of
benevolence already adopted, the eye of hope rests with anxious solicitude on
the next generation... [Is benevolence not] an appropriate sphere for the
efforts of woman, through whose moulding hands all our children and youth must
inevitably pass?...
3. Intellectual culture. This trait of character is of inestimable
value to a lady who desires to be useful. A thorough and well balanced
intellectual education, will be to her a valuable auxiliary in every department
of duty...
4. Physical culture. The value of health to a lady is inestimable...
Document C
Emma Willard, "An Address to the Public; Particularly to the Members of
the Legislature of New York, Proposing a Plan for Improving Female
Education" (1819).
Education should seek to bring its subjects to the perfection of their moral,
intellectual and physical nature: in order, that they may be of the greatest
possible use to themselves and others... [Willard then lists essential
curriculum for female education]
1. Religious and Moral. A regular attention to religious duties would, of
course be required of the pupils by the laws of the institution.... The
evidences of Christianity, and moral philosophy, would constitute a part of
their studies.
2. Literary Instruction. [Willard says that science is not taught at the
academies not because it is not important but because there is not suitable
instruction materials. Nevertheless, sciences "should engage the youthful
attention of my sex."].... [B]ooks, written for the other [gender], would
need alteration; because, in some, they presuppose more knowledge than female
pupils would possess; in others, they have parts not particularly interesting
to our sex, and omit subjects immediately relating to their pursuits. There
would likewise be needed...some works, which I believe are nowhere extant, such
as a systematic treatise on housewifery.
3. Domestic Instruction should be considered important in a female seminary. It
is the duty of our sex to regulate the internal concerns of every family; and
unless they be properly qualified to discharge this duty, whatever may be their
literary or ornamental attainments, they cannot be expected to make either good
wives, good mothers, or good mistresses of families: and if they are none of
these, they must be bad members of society; for it is by promoting or
destroying the comfort and prosperity of their own families, that females serve
or injure the community...
4. Ornamental Branches...[such as] drawing and painting, elegant penmanship,
music, and the grace of motion. Needle-work...should either be taught in the
domestic department, or made a qualification for entrance...The grace of
motion, must be learnt chiefly from instruction in dancing. Exercise is needful
to the health, and recreation to the cheerfulness and contentment of youth....
Document D
Catharine Beecher, "Suggestions Respecting Improvements in Education"
(1829)
It is to mothers and to teachers that the world is to look for the character
which is to be enstamped on each succeeding generation, for it is to them that
the great business of education is almost exclusively committed....[Yet]
neither mothers nor teachers have ever been properly educated for their
profession. What is the profession of a Woman? Is it not to form immortal
minds, and to watch, to nurse, and to rear the bodily system, so fearfully and
wonderfully made, and upon the order and regulation of which, the health and
well-being of the mind so greatly depends?
It has been a prominent aim with the Principle of this Institution, to have at
least Geography, Grammar, Arithmetic, Composition, and Mental Philosophy taught
thoroughly. The object of Grammar is to enable us to understand and to use
language, and consequently a knowledge of this science is one of the first
things demanded in a course of education where language is to be the chief
medium of instruction.
The object of the study of Arithmetic is to discipline the mind, and thus
prepare it to receive and apply knowledge. The object of practicing the art of
Composition is, to obtain method and facility in communicating ideas to others.
The object of attending to Mental Philosophy and Geography is, to gain in the
first place a knowledge of ourselves and in the next place, of the world we
dwell in, and of the fellow beings who inhabit it. Few will assert that (aside
from instruction in our religious duties and relations) any other branches are
to supersede these in importance, or attention.
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